Haiku

[pultneytooner]

My take, for what its worth is, what are you trying to communicate, and therefore are you asking or are you telling? Does making it a question improve it or not?
Alternatively, you could allow the reader to find out for him/herself whether a question exists.
I guess that forever is not neccessarily forever if that makes sense.
Think I'm out of my depth here.:confused

[Kingetter]

I guess that forever is not neccessarily forever if that makes sense.
Think I'm out of my depth here.:confused

No, I think you're just 'going boldly forth' where (you've) never been. Experimentation is good - opens the mind to unimagined possibilities and, believe it or not - you could get to like it :lol:

In a sense, you're translating from one 'language' to another and it has not yet become automatic - give it time and patience.
James.

[Gleber2]

I thought a ? after forever would add something or is that silly?

Dimly clear could almost describe the game of life. In that case an interrogative might add to it.A comma after clear still has a place no matter how you regard it. It is, after all, poets choice.

[pultneytooner]

Thanks for the help guys.

[Kingetter]

Thanks for the help guys.

Above all - just keep on trying - we welcome the efforts.

[Lavenderblue2]

I'm not too sure if I've got the hang of this yet but here's another try.

Got it wrong first off
But my friends put me right
On this chilly night


I was so happy
Lolling in my chair tonight
Viewing Autumn Watch

LB

[phoenix]

Moon shines so brightly
Her aura so colourful
On cold Autumn night.

[pultneytooner]

water screams hoarsely
haunts brightly, reflections dance
regretful, peaceful

[Lavenderblue2]

I bent to kiss her
She fondly touched my hair
Grandma I love you.

Oh! no season - never mind!

[Lavenderblue2]

Twinkling clear nights now
As sharp frosts begin to show
Heavenly dancers.

[Lavenderblue2]

Green is fading fast
Frosty fingers search our bones
Winter draws on now!


Excuse the pun:D

[trinkie]

Nice one L.B.....

Winter draws on now
Bobble hat upon my brow
Fingers clad in mitts

[Lavenderblue2]

Swallows are gone now
Last May time so far away
Dare I wish for spring?

[Lavenderblue2]

The sky this morning
Magnificent show of light
As autumn takes hold

[Gleber2]

The sky this morning
Magnificent show of light
As autumn takes hold


Y'all are sure getting the hang of it. I noticed, in the link posted by Sporran, that the three lines don't need to be connected. Three separate thoughts to conjure up an image singular to the perception of each reader.

[Lavenderblue2]

Y'all are sure getting the hang of it. I noticed, in the link posted by Sporran, that the three lines don't need to be connected. Three separate thoughts to conjure up an image singular to the perception of each reader.

Don't encourage me G2 - I'm disjointed enough in my day-to-day life without writing it down!

LB

[Sporran]

Lavenderblue2
I love your Haiku verses
Keep up the good work!

Pultneytooner too
Your Haiku bring a new twist
Different is your take.

Phoenix and Trinkie
Another talented pair
You both have the knack.

[trinkie]

Sporran is gen'rous
Kind words of encouragement
Shine down upon us

[pultneytooner]

Rivers meander
sneering, neatly brutishly
illusory frost

[phoenix]

Will it be the French
or the Scottish tomorrow
who shall win the game.

[phoenix]

Gladiolas bloom
in Autumn rain they blossom
with many flowers.

[pultneytooner]

Softly, prayers wait.
Prayers sing but winter works.
Walked perfumed fear breaks.

[Gleber2]

Pultenytooner's weird
Planet Earth is a crazy place
Autumn sun shining

[pultneytooner]

Pultenytooner's weird
Planet Earth is a crazy place
Autumn sun shining

Thanks gleber2, was that a compliment...........[lol]

My haiku is nonsense
painstakingly crafted nonsense
The fool is most wise

[Gleber2]

There are no limits
Goose sauce is good for ganders
Bloody winter comes.

[phoenix]

Black clouds oppressing
Rain falling lashing dancing
Autumn fire so cosy.

[pultneytooner]

Lovers scold autumn.
Small rain forever eats rain.
Snow offers water.

Midsummer
By the cavern I tremble
The day is old.

In the mountain
The sound of winter
And broken boughs

By the glen
Breaking the silence
Summer rush.

[Kingetter]

Thanks gleber2, was that a compliment...........[lol]

My haiku is nonsense
painstakingly crafted nonsense
The fool is most wise

"Better a witty fool than a foolish wit" - Wm. S.;)

[pultneytooner]

"Better a witty fool than a foolish wit" - Wm. S.;)
That depends what category I come under.:D

[Kingetter]

That depends what category I come under.:D


Wittier than fool
Or more foolish than a wit?
Who are we to judge?;)

[canuck]

water screams hoarsely
haunts brightly, reflections dance
regretful, peaceful

Caithness beckons me.
Might I soon visit that place
Where reflections dance?

[phoenix]

Scotland is winning
on this cold wet autumn day
can they keep it up.

[canuck]

My bags are packed
Air ticket and passport ready
See you next weekend.

[Kingetter]

My bags are packed
Air ticket and passport ready
See you next weekend.


Ticket and passport
Is about all you'll carry
On to Silver Bird

[trinkie]

Soft bed made ready
Shelves piled high with such delights
Autumn breeze awaits






Safe Journey.....

[Gleber2]

Words flow like water
The Cosmos on the brink now
Winter could see it.

[Kingetter]

Are words not the ink
That flows from creativeness
To express our thoughts?

[Gleber2]

Thoughts, like caresses
Comfort and lull and confuse
As cold night will fall.

[Kingetter]

I lay wrapped in dreams
Like folds of the restless sea
Floating and drifting.

[Kingetter]

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[Lavenderblue2]

Minds are in turmoil
Phoenix is leaving the org
Members warm round her

Drawing her back in
Giving praise she deserves now
Hoping she will stay.

LB

[Kingetter]

When choices are made
For whatever the reason
It is up to them.

[phoenix]

The controller hides
alone in his dark cavern
hiding behind quill.

[pultneytooner]

Here's some more nonsense.:D

In the mountain
The sound of spring
And laughters.

Witching hour
The warblers
Shivering.

excited humid
frostbites intoxicate, stars
reverberate, old

criticism and possibly some pointers from gleber2 and kingetter.

[Kingetter]

Here's some more nonsense.:D

In the mountain
The sound of spring
And laughters.

Witching hour
The warblers
Shivering.

excited humid
frostbites intoxicate, stars
reverberate, old

criticism and possibly some pointers from gleber2 and kingetter.

I'll make just the one point - Haiku - 5-7-5. Would you like to try that one again perhaps? I'd like to see that. Get that right and then think of content. Hope this helps.

[Gleber2]

One of the short list for this years Turner Prize is the rubbish from the artists studio floor arranged in three cases. Anything can be considered art these days.
My point is, Pultenytooner, is that your poetry needs to satisfy you. If it does, it's good. Free form is not my most favourite of forms but one man's meat is another man's poison.

[pultneytooner]

I'll make just the one point - Haiku - 5-7-5. Would you like to try that one again perhaps? I'd like to see that. Get that right and then think of content. Hope this helps.


One of the short list for this years Turner Prize is the rubbish from the artists studio floor arranged in three cases. Anything can be considered art these days.
My point is, Pultenytooner, is that your poetry needs to satisfy you. If it does, it's good. Free form is not my most favourite of forms but one man's meat is another man's poison.

Thanks guys, I just wrote what I thought and forgot about the 5.7.5 and I know this is wrong but it's harder than I first thought.
Freeform doesn't sit well with me either but I find it very hard to come up with something decent.
Maybe I'll give it up as a lost cause, I tried.:D

[Kingetter]

PT, G2 is absolutely right about satisfaction, and I know somehow you can do it. Once you do you will enjoy even if for now its a 'lost cause'. Nothing wrong as such with your work as freeform but if Haiku you wish, 5-7-5:)

[phoenix]

Clouds like angel wings
float around in autumn sky
a joy to behold.

[Gleber2]

Clouds like angel wings
float around in autumn sky
a joy to behold.

Lovely!!!!!!

[Sporran]

Canuck's happy now
She's in Scotland that she's missed
Meeting Orger friends.

[Kingetter]

Haiku made the grade
Its Front Page News on the Org
Thanks to all of you!

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Fourteen line sonnets
Get mentioned in dispatches
Its wonderful news.

Since Lit Board started
So many contributions
And all down to you.

Thanks go to the Org
For giving us this great chance
We're truly grateful.

[Sporran]

Hooray for Haiku
I'm happy it made front page
So encouraging!

[trinkie]

Well done Haiku fans
A story in three short lines
Autumn winds are kind

[Lavenderblue2]

Happy for Haiku
Brightening a dull moment
Autumn winds are wild.

LB

[Big Jean]

Ghostly sights and sounds
Not yet here, but looking now
Christmas trees appear !

For those who might object to the word " Christmas", the last line could be --

Holidays draw near .

[Gleber2]

Ghostly sights and sounds
Not yet here, but looking now
Christmas trees appear !

For those who might object to the word " Christmas", the last line could be --

Holidays draw near .

'Holidays' would count as three, 'Christmas' as two don't you think?

[Big Jean]

Hi Gleber2

Yes, Holidays would be three and Christmas two, but reading the entire line change, " Christmas trees appear" or "Holidays draw near", do they both not come out to the number 5 ?

Perhaps I should have just left well enough alone as I celebrate Christmas, although must admit I think it a bit early to see these decorations along with the ghosts and goblins etc !

[Gleber2]

Hi Gleber2

Yes, Holidays would be three and Christmas two, but reading the entire line change, " Christmas trees appear" or "Holidays draw near", do they both not come out to the number 5 ?

Perhaps I should have just left well enough alone as I celebrate Christmas, although must admit I think it a bit early to see these decorations along with the ghosts and goblins etc !

Humbly apologise. You are right. I am abashed.:~(

[Big Jean]

No need to apologize . It is a good thing someone keeps us on the right path !! I almost put "holidays" down and counted twice before realizing it would be too much ! Why is it 5-7-5 seems so difficult at times?

[Kingetter]

After a while, maybe you'll think of it as a beginning, middle and an end, and the rhythm is what will give you the syllables?

[Big Jean]

Will try it that way Kingetter, thanks .

Hmmm, just like life without the syllables !!!!! A beginning, middle, end and with rhythm !!

[Kingetter]

Will try it that way Kingetter, thanks .

Hmmm, just like life without the syllables !!!!! A beginning, middle, end and with rhythm !!

Hard to find analogies that suit everyone, but maybe from a visual effect point of view -
first line before the wave
second line wave crest
third line after the wave

As G2 has said about his thinking in Haiku - its a good starting place. Rhythm will surely follow.

First think in Haiku
Then convert thoughts into words
But speak them aloud!

[Big Jean]

Certainly will give that a try . Thanks again . J.

[Kingetter]

:) Welcome:)

[Gleber2]

Wind rising rain falls
In anticipation now
Awaiting Canuck.

[Errogie]

Fall cooking chestnuts
Smelling on the open stove
Ah, tasting so good.

[Big Jean]

Memories for me.
Like today, sunshine, cool breeze,
Was my wedding day .

[Kingetter]

Memories for me
A day I wish to forget
Was my wedding day

(Thanks BJ for giving me a leadin)

[Moira]

Autumn sun is warm
Unlike previous seasons
Strong friendships are formed

[Kingetter]

Warm October day
Leads to cool and foggy night
When much is hidden.

[Big Jean]

Our memories may differ Kingetter but you are welcome for the lead in . I know many who feel the same as you about that day . J.

[Sporran]

The old Marine Inn
Is up for sale in Thurso
Wonder who will buy?

'Twas the drinking place
Of many a fisherman
Weary from the sea

They shared their old tales
Over a beer or a dram
Spinning many yarns

Their faces ruddy
And weatherbeaten sometimes
List'ning with intent

The fishermen drank
Inside the old Marine Inn
Sadly that's no more!

[trinkie]

Nice one Sporran.
I liked that. One for the archives I think. It's good to mark the
changing landscape with a poem.
Well done.
Trinkie

[Kingetter]

I very much echo Trinkie's comments, a good theme on which to write and well composed. Good one Sporran.
James.

[Gleber2]

I often wonder
When the swallows have long gone
Where have we gone wrong.

[Kingetter]

Going wrong my friend
Is not just through the doing
But from the undone.

[Gleber2]

Knots have unravell'd
Puffins cannot find their way
Is it all our fault.

[Kingetter]

Are we the Masters
Who control all living things?
Who else can we blame?

[Gleber2]

Myths, legends and tales
Confuse and hide the real truth.
Does a God exist

[Sporran]

Nice one Sporran.
I liked that. One for the archives I think. It's good to mark the
changing landscape with a poem.
Well done.

Trinkie




I very much echo Trinkie's comments, a good theme on which to write and well composed. Good one Sporran.

James.

Thanks so much, Trinkie and Kingetter. I'm glad you both liked it! :D

Sporran

[Gleber2]

Thanks so much, Trinkie and Kingetter. I'm glad you both liked it! :D

Sporran

Add my praise to the list.:D

[Kingetter]

Myths, legends and tales
Confuse and hide the real truth.
Does a God exist

Hide the real truth? How?
Has anyone ever known?
Only if you believe.

[Gleber2]

Hide the real truth? How?
Has anyone ever known?
Only if you believe.

God does not exist.
Reality is not real
Who can know Maya..

[Kingetter]

He does or does not?
What is reality then?
So is Maya real?

[Kingetter]

In Caithness they care
About Madonna and Child
But in Africa

In Caithness they shun
Good News of Caithnessians
How little they care.

[Gleber2]

He does or does not?
What is reality then?
So is Maya real?

Illusion be real?
There can be no horizon
Winter ice blocking.

[Kingetter]

If one dismantles
And takes everything away
What have we got left?

[Gleber2]

One and one only
the illusion of selfhood
As a snowflake melts.

[Kingetter]

But one is not one
But two or possibly three
Id and the ego.

[Gleber2]

Schitzophrenia
Not divided, but complete
Soul to over soul

[Kingetter]

This topic has strayed
Into darkness and psyche
I only seek light.

[Gleber2]

Both sides must balance
for oneness and harmony
To rule the senses.

[Sporran]

Thanks so much, Trinkie and Kingetter. I'm glad you both liked it! :D

Sporran




Add my praise to the list.:D

Thankyou for your praise
Your kudos are most welcome
Pat on back for me!

[Kingetter]

Both sides must balance
for oneness and harmony
To rule the senses.

With this I concur
And in no way dispute
But I need new theme.

[Kingetter]

Thankyou for your praise
Your kudos are most welcome
Pat on back for me!


Sporran, most important, are you enjoying Haiku? Actually, are we all enjoying it?

[trinkie]

Spinning and knitting
Sharing a yarn together
Winter smiles all round

[Kingetter]

Spinning and knitting
Sharing a yarn together
Winter smiles all round
Excellent - and doesn't it portray a woderful sense of well-being?

[phoenix]

Tis moths who seek light
they know what they are doing
with their words that lure.

[trinkie]

Reach for the mountain
But keep your feet on the land
Seek for Light in all

[Kingetter]

And what lies beyond
The mountain you have reached for?
Is it Nirvana?

[Gleber2]

The journey is long
Mountain passes now snow blocked
Grass is no greener.

[Kingetter]

You sound like you've been
Or how would you know these things?
It never will be.

[Gleber2]

Underestimation
The book not yet been written
Conclusion jumper.

[Kingetter]

My time runneth out
Maybe can't wait for the book
Anticipator.

[Sporran]

Thankyou for your praise
Your kudos are most welcome
Pat on back for me!




Sporran, most important, are you enjoying Haiku? Actually, are we all enjoying it?

Haiku I enjoy
I like to read and write it
I hope you do too! :)

[Kingetter]

Near four hundred posts
I think the message is clear
We certainly do.

[Gleber2]

To make a new friend
In the dark winter's gloaming
Is nothing but good.

[canuck]

Bannish the silver bird
Bannish the bird for one day.
It takes me far off.

[Gleber2]

Bannish the silver bird
Bannish the bird of one day.
It takes me far off.

That same silver bird
Can take you back to us soon
When winter frost gleams.

[Kingetter]

To make a new friend
In the dark winter's gloaming
Is nothing but good.

To make one new friend
Is such a wonderful thing
But four in a day?

[Kingetter]

Bannish the silver bird
Bannish the bird of one day.
It takes me far off.

The body has gone
But the spirit remains here
So you must return.

[Kingetter]

That same silver bird
Can take you back to us soon
When winter frost gleams.

When next you come back
It will be to stay longer
For here you belong.

[phoenix]

Autumn rain washes
and cleanses all in its path
rivers flowing fast.

[phoenix]

A robin singing
on wet october morning
his song is so sweet.

[Gleber2]

Hey Phoenix, you're getting good at this.:D

[Sporran]

Autumn mist today
Now cleared as sunshine beams down
Gentle breeze through trees.

[phoenix]

Hey Phoenix, you're getting good at this.:D

Thankyou Gleber2! :Razz

The rain is pouring
turning burns into rivers
cascading over rocks.

[pultneytooner]

By the glen
Waiting for you
Winter darkness.

[Kingetter]

By the glen
Waiting for you
Winter darkness.

PT, very nice theme but not 5-7-5. You've got 3-4-4

[pultneytooner]

PT, very nice theme but not 5-7-5. You've got 3-4-4
Thanks for your kind words kingetter but I am afraid I am not cut out for this.:confused

[Kingetter]

Thanks for your kind words kingetter but I am afraid I am not cut out for this.:confused

PT, I beg to differ 'cos the form is only part of the thing - you have a good theme there and in my book, a theme is as important. Plug away until you get there and feel that great sense of achievement which makes it all worthwhile.
James.

[Kingetter]

Tiger Jones


Striped feline who prowls
In the forums of the org
Birthday time for you!

[roblovesplastic]

Autumn is leaving.
Yet the winter has no fear.
I will not drink beer.

[Kingetter]

Autumn is leaving.
Yet the winter has no fear.
I will not drink beer.



Titles? Not traditionally as they were apt to be thoughts perhaps spoken out loud but not as a rule written.

[trinkie]

Rest, after travels
A pale moon on your pillow
Morning comes too soon

[Pink Lippy]

Today was estranged
Orgers passed by unnoticed
As Autumn leaves fell

[Pink Lippy]

My time in Japan
Was so warm and well nourished
As Autumn leaves flew

[Pink Lippy]

The inner circle
Of the Orgers doth exist
Into it I'll Spring

[Kingetter]

To see new posters
On this Literature Board
Brings me much delight.

[Tiger Jones]

Tiger Jones


Striped feline who prowls
In the forums of the org
Birthday time for you!



Delighted I am
At Haiku written for me
this is an honour

[sapphire]

Gazing down at child
Sleeping peaceful in my arms
My heart bursts with love

[Kingetter]

Child wakes, looks at me
Love reflected constantly
A bundle of Joy!

[sapphire]

Child wakes, looks at me
Love reflected constantly
A bundle of Joy!

What a wonderful mirror image!!,,,Thank you for adding that!

[Kingetter]

Maybe an encouragement for you to add more?

[sapphire]

I watch him sleeping
Smiling softly as he breathes
Without him I'm lost

[sapphire]

If today you cried
May tomorrow bring you joy
no more sadness....ever!



(Kingetter should I have used 'sorrow' instead of 'sadness'?)...sorry to be a pain and annoy you so much!

[Kingetter]

If today you cried
May tomorrow bring you joy
no more sadness....ever!



(Kingetter should I have used 'sorrow' instead of 'sadness'?)...sorry to be a pain and annoy you so much!

Personally I prefer use of sadness rather than sorrow but you have another problem there - 3rd line is 6 not 5 syllables - ever = e (1) ver (1) so 2 though I think you thought 1(?). Maybe try "No more tears .... ever"?
Not a pain and no annoyance - glad you're joining in - great stuff!

[sapphire]

Told you I wasn' good at 'English'..but I will try !

[sapphire]

Personally I prefer use of sadness rather than sorrow but you have another problem there - 3rd line is 6 not 5 syllables - ever = e (1) ver (1) so 2 though I think you thought 1(?). Maybe try "No more tears .... ever"?
Not a pain and no annoyance - glad you're joining in - great stuff!


I prefer it your way with 'tears'

If today you cried
May tomorrow bring you joy
No more tears...ever

[Kingetter]

Told you I wasn' good at 'English'..but I will try !

Doesn't stop you learning though right?

[sapphire]

Doesn't stop you learning though right?

I think you make a brilliant teacher!...but 3 lines is about as much as I can manage!

[Kingetter]

I prefer it your way with 'tears'

If today you cried
May tomorrow bring you joy
No more tears...ever

Fine, but please experiment - you may surprise yourself.;)

[Sporran]

G2's back in biz
Performing live in Caithness
Music to our ears!

[Gleber2]

G2's back in biz
Performing live in Caithness
Music to our ears!

Gee. ta!!!!

[Sporran]

G2's back in biz
Performing live in Caithness
Music to our ears!




Gee. ta!!!!

You're welcome kind sir
We do appreciate you
Live and on CD!

[sapphire]

No chance to say bye
you left me so suddenly
and broke my heart, dad

[Lavenderblue2]

Sympathy Sapphire
At the loss of your dear Dad
Time will heal the pain.

[sapphire]

I look back and think
of childhood days filled with love
and wish I was there

[Lavenderblue2]

Playing out all day,
not a care in the world then…
Summer, winter, spring.

[Kingetter]

I look back and think
of childhood days filled with love
and wish I was there

Is there not love now?
Was it only for childhood?
What's wrong with it here?

[sapphire]

Is there not love now?
Was it only for childhood?
What's wrong with it here?


I was just thinking about my Dad and how much I still miss him..... even after all these years... I just couldn't reply to yours as a haiku....sorry!

[sapphire]

Is there not love now?
Was it only for childhood?
What's wrong with it here?


Love all around me
I feel it near everyday
it lifts spirits high!

Kingetter please don't tell me everyday is a 3 cos I don't talk that way!:lol:

[sapphire]

Sorry that should have been a 4 for everyday not a 3...see I haven't a clue what I'm doing.....and I can't get it to edit either!

[canuck]

I look toward Hoy.
The sea paints pictures with its
currents rushing wild.

[Sporran]

Hoy's a view I miss
From the house I grew up in
'Twas a welcome sight!

[sapphire]

I don't know you well
but we have become good friends
we'll meet soon.....can't wait! :)

[canuck]

Ah, sapphire so blue
Sporran and I live far west
Meeting us must wait.

[phoenix]

Water everywhere
cleansing all thats in its path
emotions run high.

[Kingetter]

Ah, sapphire so blue
Sporran and I live far west
Meeting us must wait.


Canuck far away
Sporran less so but still distant
Maybe not for you?

[Sporran]

Caithness waters high
A startling sight to behold
Keep safe from harm, folks!

[Kingetter]

Much water we've seen
Than we're able to measure
Let's hope there's no more

[Sporran]

Bridges washed away
By rushing, swelling rivers
Waterfloods abound!

High winds, fallen trees,
Broken branches obstructing
Man's route of travel.

Wartime shells wash up
Deadly reminder from past
Danger UXB!

Tracks bent and buckled
Smashed by raging floodwater
When will it all end???

[Sporran]

Halloween gives way
And the saints come marching in
On All Hallows Day.

[trinkie]

Autumn nights are long
Without Haiku to bring cheer
And days are too short

[Sporran]

Fireworks and bonfires
Will soon colour the dark night
On November 5th.

[canuck]

The party is off
No Lighthouse for orgers this year.
October next year?

[Kingetter]

When one door closes
Another one will open
Where? is the question.

[Kingetter]

Something different -

Claim: Japanese software replaces Microsoft error messages with haiku poetry.
Status: False.
Example: [Seattle Post-Intelligencer, 2002]

In Japan, they have replaced the impersonal and unhelpful Microsoft Error messages with Haiku poetry messages. Haiku poetry has strict construction rules. Each poem has only three lines, 17 syllables: five syllables in the first line, seven in the second, five in the third.
Haikus are used to communicate a timeless message often achieving a wistful, yearning and powerful insight through extreme brevity — the essence of Zen:

Your file was so big.
It might be very useful.
But now it is gone.

The Web site you seek
Cannot be located, but
Countless more exist.

Chaos reigns within.
Reflect, repent, and reboot.
Order shall return.

Program aborting:
Close all that you have worked on.
You ask far too much.

Windows NT crashed.
I am the Blue Screen of Death.
No one hears your screams.

Yesterday it worked.
Today it is not working.
Windows is like that.

First snow, then silence.
This thousand-dollar screen dies
So beautifully.

With searching comes loss
And the presence of absence:
"My Novel" not found.

The Tao that is seen
Is not the true Tao-until
You bring fresh toner.

Stay the patient course.
Of little worth is your ire.
The network is down.

A crash reduces
Your expensive computer
To a simple stone.

Three things are certain:
Death, taxes and lost data.
Guess which has occurred.

You step in the stream,
But the water has moved on.
This page is not here.

Out of memory.
We wish to hold the whole sky,
But we never will.

Having been erased,
The document you're seeking
Must now be retyped.

Serious error.
All shortcuts have disappeared.
Screen. Mind. Both are blank.

http://www.snopes.com/computer/internet/haiku.asp

[sapphire]

Happy I would be
these messages to receive
when things do go wrong

[Kingetter]

We can't know happy
Without us knowing sorrow
Or so it does seem.

[sapphire]

See past the sorrow
tomorrow's another day
and happy we'll be

[Kingetter]

I live for today
May not have a tomorrow
Enjoy while I can.

[Gleber2]

Hours like seconds fly
Leaves have blown in winter wind
We await our fate.

[Big Jean]

On Remembrance Day,
Tears are shed, memories flow,
As I remember .

[Big Jean]

They did not stand still,
Called by their countries to serve,
We stand now - silent .

[Sporran]

Brave Caithness soldiers
Call of duty to Iraq
Off to Basra soon

We pray for you all
Many thoughts will be with you,
And your families

Haste ye back, brave lads
May God keep you safe and well
Till you homeward come!

[Sporran]

Sometimes she's gentle
Cradling ships like a baby
As they sail through her

Other times she warns
That her temper is brewing
Treat her with respect

But windswept fury
Engulfed her this November
And she rose enraged

With a mighty surge
Her powerful salty waves
Crashed upon ship deck

Two men's lives she claimed
Like an angry woman scorned
Hellbent on revenge

We pray for their souls
These mariners of the sea
Loved ones mourn their loss

No more will they sail
On waters smooth or stormy
Long they'll rest in peace!

[trinkie]

Very beautiful indeed, thank you for that.

Trinkie

[Sporran]

You're very welcome, Trinkie. :) I was feeling very inspired yesterday!

[trinkie]

Inspiration comes
And pen is put to paper
How rare those moments

[Sporran]

The muse must visit
To spark our creative thoughts
Bringing verse again.

[roblovesplastic]

one love and one heart
let us praise the lord
evil winter shine

[canuck]

Yahoo is a friend
As long as it doesn't freeze and
Stop the flow of words.

[canuck]

The muse must visit
To spark our creative thoughts
Bringing verse again.

The rake is hidden
Let it stay behind the boxes
In the shed, 'til Spring.

[Sporran]

Majestic oak tree
Is starting to lose its leaves
In my back garden

Some leaves are still green
And others have turned to rust
A bicolour tree!

The wind is blowing
And stealing the rusted leaves
From my oak tree now

The leaves flutter down
Then dance around the green grass
As the breeze blows through.

[canuck]

Computer crashed!
Muses said to rake some leaves
Ten bags and counting.

[Kingetter]

Computer crashed!
Muses said to rake some leaves
Ten bags and counting.

Need something funny?
Then go to Together thread
To give you a laugh.

[Sporran]

Brandy's had her op.
Glad that everything went well
Soon she'll be back home!

[roblovesplastic]

My car I have trashed
To be alive I am lucky
Thank god its not winter

[canuck]

My car I have trashed
To be alive I am lucky
Thank god its not winter


I talked to him
Rob seems okay, car is toast.
Please be careful all.

[Sporran]

My car I have trashed
To be alive I am lucky
Thank god its not winter


I talked to him
Rob seems okay, car is toast.
Please be careful all.

Sorry your car's trashed
Thank goodness you're OK, Rob
Scary just the same!

[Sporran]

Rheghead and his wife
Are joyous parents to be
Summer brings new birth!

[Sporran]

Yuletide's almost here
Season of bright lights and cheer
Times that we hold dear!

[golach]

Bah Humbug Boo Yah
no thankyou Xmas Cheer
Everything is too dear

[Samuri]

Hey this Haikus good
for the long cold winter nights
when all is quiet!

[trinkie]

Golach has joined us
Grumpy old man and Haiku
Winter has arrived.

[Sporran]

Bah Humbug Boo Yah
no thankyou Xmas Cheer
Everything is too dear


Golach has joined us
Grumpy old man and Haiku
Winter has arrived.

Golach is no Scrooge
Methinks he likes to kid us
With his attitude

[Samuri]

Sun so far away
the wind she blows soft and warm
on November day!

[roblovesplastic]

Today he flew off
Drift into November sky
I will miss your groove:(

[Gleber2]

Today he flew off
Drift into November sky
I will miss your groove:(

Many are the thoughts
Fleeting across new felt grief
Winter now colder.

[Chobbersjnr]

I was twelve years old
The music was transcendental
Rest in peace old friend.

[canuck]

Three fine friends feel grief.

The darkness of their moment
Shared by us all.


Peace to you rob, G2 and Cjnr.

[Samuri]

Tis so cold and wet
as November days they close
and xmas draws near!

[roblovesplastic]

this is what he wants
:D faces this December
I am moving on

[Ricco]

How cold the nights, the distant chill,
I think back in time, remember,
And time grows still.

[canuck]

They think they are smart
Dissenting orgers will soon
Go off to org jail


It seems this to me
I was once called pedant
Must be all the rain


We three who must write
When the first snow is falling
Will share the same cell

The snow is falling
Haiku has come a long way
The org is blessed.


Haiku is strict in form
Rules are not to be broken
Five seven five must be.


How cold the nights, the distant chill,
I think back in time, remember,
And time grows still.

Five seven five must be.
Gleber2 said it, not me.
Ricco stay with us.

[Sporran]

New poets welcome
Please help us and contribute
Keep this thread alive!

Haiku is simple
Five, seven, five syllables
On lines one, two, three

Before you know it
It will be a piece of cake
You'll have it down pat! :)

[Ann]

To those who are new to this delightful form of Japanese poetry, you may wish to read the following taken from a website, the link to which follows in my next post.

"The Haiku Essence

To me, finding what gives the haiku its essence is what is most important in its study. Sure, everyone knows about the 5-7-5 structure and the inclusion of a seasonal reference, but these seem secondary when one looks at what makes the haiku different from other poetic forms. And that is called the "haiku moment."
Haiku Moment: It seems easiest to liken haiku to a photograph, which captures a moment in time. A pure photograph describes a scene, and this description causes an emotional response in its viewer. There is no caption on the photograph that tells us what emotional response we are to take from it. It is instead a simple moment in time, unencumbered.
Haiku is the same thing. When a butterfly lands upon an open flower, what does the haiku poet take from this? The same thing that his reader will take from it when he describes the moment in verse. But he trusts his reader to sense the same emotion from his accurate description of the scene. He does not need to say "How beautiful!" in reference to the moment, because his words should evoke the correct response in his reader.
Japanese Nature

This type of art form is seen often in Japan, from the careful skill of Japanese flower arranging (ikebana), to the care in the presentation of given gifts. Food preparation is another art form which utilizes the same essence of beauty within a moment of time. Colors, shapes and textures and of course the sensation of taste, must all be taken into account, to be both harmonious and contrasting.
Haiku follows the same pattern as these examples. It captures a moment, describing objects within the frame, and the beauty is gleaned from the emotions evoked from such a presentation. Perhaps the most famous haiku poet, Basho, said, "The haiku that reveals seventy to eighty percent of its subject is good. Those that reveal fifty to sixty percent we never tire of." What this tells us is that the nature of haiku is in letting the reader's response finish the poem."

[Ann]

Hope this will help our aspiring poets! It's good to see such interest in one of my favourite forms of verse.

http://www.schoollink.org/csd/pages/engl/haiku.html

[Kingetter]

Nib goes to paper
Words will not come, nor ink flow
Writers' Block - A curse


Nib returns to page
Ink begins to flow, slowly
Words finally come

[Kingetter]

Tools working at last
For how long? We never know
For such is writing

Remember rhythm
Think of themes - seasons are right
Write while ink still comes

Keep that 5, 7, 5,
Or it is not The Haiku
Only Haiku here

[Kingetter]

Mighty oak stands proud
Through seasons of many years
It stands test of time


From small beginnings
Acorn grows to be such a size
Wondrous is Nature

[Kingetter]

Cold and quick Mistral
Unstoppable by mountains
Yet gives surfers joy


Chinook - snoweater
Brings winters snow to an end
Messenger of Spring?

[Sporran]

Christmas trees so bright
Colourful baubles and lights
Cheer up winter nights.

[Sporran]

Season of goodwill
Gift giving and receiving
Warm hearts, winter chill.

[Gleber2]

Credit cards red hot
Shopkeepers rubbing their hands
Did Jesus want this.

[Sporran]

Credit cards red hot
Shopkeepers rubbing their hands
Did Jesus want this.

Methinks he did not
Spending has gone overboard
In this day and age

We must remember
The true meaning of Christmas
As we celebrate.

[Gleber2]

Mithrans celebrate
So do Druids from our land
No Marks and Spencers.


Jesus came later
There were no Christmas cards then
And no plastic toys.

[canuck]

Credit cards red hot
Shopkeepers rubbing their hands
Did Jesus want this.

Jesus wanted peace
Food for the hungry, drink for thirst
A roof in the rain.

[roblovesplastic]

A rock is a rock
Spring Summer Autum Winter
Stones strive to be sand

[Big Jean]

Pockets are empty.
The children don't understand,
No presents for them .

If each one of us
Can buy just one extra toy,
Smiles will come again .

[canuck]

Lights are kewl, so kewl
In the darkness, minus 30
Lights are kewl, so kewl.

[Sporran]

Problems on the Org
I hope they can be resolved
Save the Forums please!

[Sporran]

Season of goodwill
Let's see it on our Forums
Forgive and forget!

[Gleber2]

The master returns
Winter turning towards spring
Hoping for world peace.

[Kenn]

DRAT I c'an't get to grips with this!

[Kingetter]

For Lizz -

Lizz, you will in time
Get hold of Haiku rhythm
Then feel the magic!

[Kingetter]

In the coming weeks
Accept the Festive Season
Friends may we all be.

[Sporran]

Kingetter's returned
Such a veritable gent
Welcome back kind sir!

[Arikara]

We dont always know
why some things happen in life
just go with the flow! http://forum.caithness.org/images/icons/icon3.gif

[Kingetter]

Dr Szin's sticky falls
Like leaf from tree in Autumn
But it may not sink.


"This sticky has served its purpose so I'm going to unstick it and let it fly in a while. I won't delete it but it'll sink rapidly when I let go..."

[Sporran]

We ready ourselves
To leave the old year behind
Celebrate the new

[Ricco]

Through my door I see,
Leaden skies above the trees,
The rain has found me.

[trinkie]

Through my door I see
Friends bearing such gifts
As love and kindness







Welcome to all !

[canuck]

Through my door I see
Leaden skies above the fields
Friends are rays of light.

[Gleber2]

Through my door I see
Mountainous waves riding high
And storm clouds gather.

[Sporran]

New Year just begun
Time of new resolutions
Will they all be kept?

[Jeemag_USA]

As the year now ends,
Another again begins,
Time is distraction.

[canuck]

Jeemag, honestly I am not the poetry police, just a bored orger.

The syllable count for Haiku is:
5 in the first line,
7 in the second line
5 in the third line.

[canuck]

New Year just begun
Time of new resolutions
Will they all be kept?

Through my door I see
A new year and the sidewalks
My resolve holds firm.

[Jeemag_USA]

Jeemag, honestly I am not the poetry police, just a bored orger.

The syllable count for Haiku is:
5 in the first line,
7 in the second line
5 in the third line.

Thanks, fixed it, once again I don't read instructions :lol:

[Sporran]

January's bleak
After the lights of Christmas
Hurry up Springtime!

[canuck]

Eight days have passed (read gone by if you are under 40)
Each one with a swim or walk
My resolve holds firm.

[Sporran]

Jeemag, honestly I am not the poetry police, just a bored orger.

The syllable count for Haiku is:
5 in the first line,
7 in the second line
5 in the third line.




Eight days have passed
Each one with a swim or walk
My resolve holds firm.

Canuck, just a friendly reminder:

There are 4 syllables, instead of 5 in your first line above.

Well done, with your swimming and walking! :)

[canuck]

Sporran, doesn't passed count as pass ed?

If not I can change it to gone by.

[Sporran]

Sporran, doesn't passed count as pass ed?

If not I can change it to gone by.

Canuck, it might be better to change it to gone by. Although I see your point, I don't think many people would read passed as the older, two syllable version.

[Gleber2]

Canuck, it might be better to change it to gone by. Although I see your point, I don't think many people would read passed as the older, two syllable version.

Canuck is right IMHO.

[canuck]

Are we old, we two
Who read passed as two full beats?
I really hope not.

[Sporran]

Canuck, it might be better to change it to gone by. Although I see your point, I don't think many people would read passed as the older, two syllable version.




Are we old, we two
Who read passed as two full beats?
I really hope not.

I meant archaic
When I said pass ed is old
Like "Wherefore art thou?"

Canuck, Gleber2
No need for you to worry
You're both in your prime!