Sonnets

[Gleber2]

This sonnet also dedicated to Gleeber and Golach.

On Hubris.

Is honesty a thing no longer sought,
By man who sets himself above the Gods,
And cares no more if evil is abroad,
But only strives for that which may be bought.
The snares in which mankind has now been caught,
Are snares of steel which tie them to the fraud,
That man, creations crown, must bear the load,
Must pay the price that Godhood be man's lot.

But Hubris is a crime no God forgives,
And man to God a step no mortal takes,
Unless the truth, in honour, has been found,
The light will be denied to all who live
And cannot see the errors and mistakes,
That tie all God's poor creatures to the ground.

[canuck]

We are fortunate to have such a very talented teacher!

[canuck]

This sonnet in the Shakespearian style is dedicated to my friends and protagonists, Gleeber and Golach.


On Hidden Knowledge.


In each man's life a time must surely come
When understanding shines like dawns clear light,
When answers come unbidden and the sum
Of mankind's hidden knowledge shines so bright.

To know the long lost secrets of the soul,
To find the key which unlocks nature's store,
To earn this wisdom should be each man's goal,
And he who seeks will never ask for more.

Behind the mind where untold riches lie
Is where to seek if wisdom is desired.
There is no price, one only needs to try,
Remaining clear with raw ambition fired.

And then the doors will surely open wide,
But always will be closed if sought with pride.

Sir, in the rhyming couplet can the rhyme be GG rather than DD, or were you doing something else with this poem?

[Moira]

See post number 10 in this thread and you shut it. What do you call a drummer without a brain?

Normal!!!!!!.

Good one. On first glance the metre is right although 'grown' could be one or two beats. Saw, not seen, is gramatically right and scans better.

Firstly - See here is what I mean - you asked a question & answered it yourself .. mmm dodgy -

Secondly you spellded the gram ... er....... grammatically "thingy" rong - ok?

I'm awful glad you didn't rip my Haiku to bits, all the same -do you want to go back & review your opinion in light of this post?

[canuck]

Green Hero

When spring comes creeping with its bud and bloom
The yard fills quickly with a sense of life
Warm rays and long hours push back deadly gloom
Green is the hero quelling winters strife.

Full leaves have more than just the shade to make
They gather light to energize the whole
And free the carbons from the air they take
To keep alive the plant which is their goal.

To break a stem and separate a leaf
May bring a death of plant and soul and heart.
To break a stem and cause a sudden grief
Will cause she, once precious, to be apart.

Those so broken may wilt and fade to coal
Or join their kind to find new worlds of soul.

[Sporran]

Canuck, your Green Hero sonnet is great!!

[golach]

This sonnet also dedicated to Gleeber and Golach.

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Just what is the point of this claptrap that you are posting on here, and dedicating to myself and gleeber.
I am not in the least interested in your rhyme, couplets or whatever.
Please desist, as its becoming a bore as far as I am concerned.

[phoenix]

Im gobsmacked by all the lovely poetry, its given me goose bumps and brought tears to my eyes!

[Gleber2]

Saveman

I've not studied the sonnet "thing" so have no idea if your "feet" were in the right place, but your "Face" was awesome. Your post spoke to me & I applaud your effort.

Gleber2 is keeping us all on track here which is excellent - just hope he doesn't go into the Haiku thread & rip my first effort to shreds

Well anyway - he was speaking to himself on here earlier - and strictly speaking his correction of your grammar was "spelted rong"

Now I see your point and yes you were right to correct me. I answered myself because the drummer didn't because I suspect he expected me to say his name.

[Gleber2]

Just what is the point of this claptrap that you are posting on here, and dedicating to myself and gleeber.
I am not in the least interested in your rhyme, couplets or whatever.
Please desist, as its becoming a bore as far as I am concerned.

Never, in the ten months I have been an orger, have you shown your true nature as well as you have done in this last post. I have considered many replies, even to the point of anticipating a ban, but instead I will let your post reply for me as all those who have a degree of poetic appreciation and understanding will see, at a glance, why you have earned the nickname Gollum among some org people. It can only be a bore if you read the posts. Do us all a favour and put me on your ignore list and then I will not bore you.

[Gleber2]

Teacher is proud of you. Have a gold star. BTW it is GG. Even the master is fallible.Is that spelt right or is it fallable. Anticipate your own mistakes and no-one can tell you that you're wrong.

[Saveman]

Good one. On first glance the metre is right although 'grown' could be one or two beats. Saw, not seen, is gramatically right and scans better.

Drat made the same mistake again....Saw not seen.....I think it's an Irish thing

[Saveman]

This sonnet also dedicated to Gleeber and Golach.

On Hubris.

Is honesty a thing no longer sought,
By man who sets himself above the Gods,
And cares no more if evil is abroad,
But only strives for that which may be bought.
The snares in which mankind has now been caught,
Are snares of steel which tie them to the fraud,
That man, creations crown, must bear the load,
Must pay the price that Godhood be man's lot.

But Hubris is a crime no God forgives,
And man to God a step no mortal takes,
Unless the truth, in honour, has been found,
The light will be denied to all who live
And cannot see the errors and mistakes,
That tie all God's poor creatures to the ground.

Now this is more like it...

[Saveman]

Green Hero

When spring comes creeping with its bud and bloom
The yard fills quickly with a sense of life
Warm rays and long hours push back deadly gloom
Green is the hero quelling winters strife.

Full leaves have more than just the shade to make
They gather light to energize the whole
And free the carbons from the air they take
To keep alive the plant which is their goal.

To break a stem and separate a leaf
May bring a death of plant and soul and heart.
To break a stem and cause a sudden grief
Will cause she, once precious, to be apart.

Those so broken may wilt and fade to coal
Or join their kind to find new worlds of soul.

Canuck! You're a natural....great stuff!

[Moira]

Just what is the point of this claptrap that you are posting on here, and dedicating to myself and gleeber.
I am not in the least interested in your rhyme, couplets or whatever.
Please desist, as its becoming a bore as far as I am concerned.

Harsh words, indeed, about a sonnet
Don't know why there's a bee in your bonnet
If you don't like, don't look, is what I'd say
And let the rest of us here, enjoy the word "play"

[Gleber2]

Harsh words, indeed, about a sonnet
Don't know why there's a bee in your bonnet
If you don't like, don't look, is what I'd say
And let the rest of us here, enjoy the word "play"

Well said, dear lady, with no forked tongue
you speak what can only be true.
Philistines among us who know not the song
Can never make me blue.

[golach]

Harsh words, indeed, about a sonnet
Don't know why there's a bee in your bonnet
If you don't like, don't look, is what I'd say
And let the rest of us here, enjoy the word "play"

Moira,
I could not care about the sonnets, its the continual sniping and belittling of not only me but gleeber, I dont speak for Gleeber, only myself.
If gleber thinks it makes his sonnets more palatable to his ego, then so be it, I did not say to him stop his writting, but to desist in dedicating them to me.
Thats my bee in my bonnet!!!!!!!
On Hubris, maybe the man that wrote it should have a look in the mirror, because it may be the cause of his ruin.

[scotsboy]

Someone takes time to dedicate a sonnet to you and you feel “belittled”…….I’d feel quite honoured.

[Gleber2]

Moira,
I could not care about the sonnets, its the continual sniping and belittling of not only me but gleeber, I dont speak for Gleeber, only myself.
If gleber thinks it makes his sonnets more palatable to his ego, then so be it, I did not say to him stop his writting, but to desist in dedicating them to me.
Thats my bee in my bonnet!!!!!!!
On Hubris, maybe the man that wrote it should have a look in the mirror, because it may be the cause of his ruin.

Have you no sense of humour man? I cannot, in any way, belittle a man who manages to belittle himself with every selfrighteous post. I can remember a particular Golach post where he spoke about affection and humour when both Gleeber and myself complained about his sly digs. Practice what you preach, Golach, and you might generate a bit more respect. This could well counter the paucity of soul, humour and understanding which you display with every complaining post. It is your ego which is the problem, not mine.

Scotsboy, thank you.

[phoenix]

Was on that day they tied me up
I heard the screams my children made
Long time ago in days gone by
I dont forget that day I died

By torch by flame they burned me
The next time round they broke me
With words that cut the snears they make
But I am stronger than they know

This time I will not let them crow
These words I block with armour shield
The thoughts they send to hurt and mame
Will not affect my family name

The light I send to those who hurt me
On that black day long time ago, they burnt me!

Dont know if thats a sonnet or not or if it rhymes ........just came into my head!