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Vistravi
11-Jan-09, 17:22
Wrote this last year and thought i'd share it with you all.;) Let me know what you think

I sit in the grass the wind ruffling my hair, the sweet smell of the nearby flowers heavy in the air.
I hear the birds singing their songs, the bees gentle humming as they visit the flowers.
my heart is content and peaceful in the tranquillity of the morning.
A small drop lands on my nose, then another and another, as I look up at the sky.
Suddenly the clouds open up and pours out their buckets of excess water.
As I run for the house i despair.
I stand by the door and look up at the sky missing the tranquillity of the sun.
Now its dark and dreary, the grass sodden and the birds hiding, and i remember that I live in Caithness.

hotrod4
13-Jan-09, 07:16
I liked it, I liked the way it "flowed"(I use that word alot;)).
I find if a poem seems to pick you up,pull you in and take you where it wants to go then it has done its job, and this has done its job!!!
Well done:lol:

Vistravi
20-Jan-09, 02:28
Thanks for your comment:)
Must admit that it came to me jus after finishing course work and here it is. [lol]