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Kingetter
05-Sep-06, 01:29
They think they are smart
Dissenting orgers will soon
Go off to org jail



I hope Haiku 'fans' will follow up on this with more and much better.

Gleber2
05-Sep-06, 03:07
Could be wrong you see
but this simple song for ye
could be my last.

Scottish haiku.

Kingetter
05-Sep-06, 03:15
Could be wrong you see
but this simple song for ye
could be my last.

Scottish haiku.


I hope you aren't right
With your so solemn reply
We need you to stay


(Haiku - 5,7,5 = 17)

trinkie
05-Sep-06, 06:28
A simple oldtimer
Bad ryhmer
One Liner
Nothing finer.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~





They never fail
To moan and wail
At lack of email
When sent to org.jail.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Kingetter
05-Sep-06, 10:37
From: http://home.clara.net/nhi/gepm002.htm

"The haiku originates from Japan.

How To Write Haiku

The haiku is a very simple form of writing. So think many poets exposed to this verse for the first time. The more perceptive of them soon realise that it can in reality be rather difficult. A casual glance at magazines or web pages will often show a wealth of examples, good, bad and indifferent. On asking further the poet usually gets told that haiku are traditionally written in three lines of 5-7-5 syllables. They may also be told that all haiku include a "season word" (kigo) to indicate the time of year to which the haiku relates. For a beginning this might do."

So, an example might be like this -

rain drops keep falling
rivers flow swiftly, seawards
to make us more rain

though "season" isn't mentioned.

Are the rules 'hard and fast' as regards form? Probably not anymore, but applying them does make haiku writing more of an inspiring challenge.

badger
05-Sep-06, 12:55
I don't know who wrote it but it was sent to me long ago and I love it -

ERROR MESSAGES

First snow, then silence.
This thousand dollar screen
Dies so beautifully.

Stay the patient course.
Of little worth is your ire
The network is down.

That which you seek
Cannot be located
But endless others exist.

Chaos reigns within.
Reflect, repent and reboot.
Order shall return.

Aborted effort:
Close all that you have.
You ask far too much.

With searching comes loss
And the presence of absence;
"My Novel" not found.

A file that big?
It might be very useful.
But now it is gone.

You are attempting a journey
Along a muddled path
File Not Found.

The Tao that is seen
Is not the true Tao until
You bring fresh toner.

Yesterday it worked.
Today it is not working.
Windows is like that.

Three things are certain:
Death, taxes and lost data.
Guess which has occurred.

You step in the stream,
But the water has moved on.
This page is not here.

Out of memory.
We wish to hold the whole sky,
But we never will.

Having been erased,
The document you're seeking
Must now be retyped.

Serious error.
All Shortcuts have disappeared.
Screen. Mind. Both are blank.

Windows NT crashed.
I am the Blue Screen of Death.
No one hears your screams.

Gleber2
05-Sep-06, 14:30
From: http://home.clara.net/nhi/gepm002.htm

"The haiku originates from Japan.

How To Write Haiku

The haiku is a very simple form of writing. So think many poets exposed to this verse for the first time. The more perceptive of them soon realise that it can in reality be rather difficult. A casual glance at magazines or web pages will often show a wealth of examples, good, bad and indifferent. On asking further the poet usually gets told that haiku are traditionally written in three lines of 5-7-5 syllables. They may also be told that all haiku include a "season word" (kigo) to indicate the time of year to which the haiku relates. For a beginning this might do."

So, an example might be like this -

rain drops keep falling
rivers flow swiftly, seawards
to make us more rain

though "season" isn't mentioned.

Are the rules 'hard and fast' as regards form? Probably not anymore, but applying them does make haiku writing more of an inspiring challenge.

What an old pedant you are!!!! But we bask in your erudition and learn from your wisdom. I always thought 14 but you are right it is 17. I will write my haikus correctly in future.:D

Kingetter
05-Sep-06, 14:37
What an old pedant you are!!!! But we bask in your erudition and learn from your wisdom. I always thought 14 but you are right it is 17. I will write my haikus correctly in future.:D

Aren't I just? Comes of not being smart and flexible/adaptable so 'stick-in-the-mud-old-me just keeps with the old ways, thus making me a traditionalist I suppose.
However, sticking to the old rules makes it more of a challenge and therefore more stimulating.

Gleber2
05-Sep-06, 15:00
It seems this to me
With cold bare trees around us
We should watch our step.

Kingetter
05-Sep-06, 15:15
It seems this to me
With the coldness of winter
We should wrap up warm

(And thanks for the starter from the previous posting).

Gleber2
05-Sep-06, 15:27
In jail for our sins
The frost will sharply bite us
We must then take care.

Kingetter
05-Sep-06, 15:36
And then we get out
And we rejoin our org friends
Are we repentant?

Gleber2
05-Sep-06, 16:07
To repent means guilt
the bright sun of innocence
shines upon me now.

canuck
05-Sep-06, 16:15
What an old pedant you are!!!! But we bask in your erudition and learn from your wisdom. I always thought 14 but you are right it is 17. I will write my haikus correctly in future.:D


It seems this to me
I was once called pedant
Must be all the rain

Gleber2
05-Sep-06, 16:23
We three who must write
When the first snow is falling
Will share the same cell

Sporran
05-Sep-06, 16:58
Summer's almost gone
Soon leaves will be falling
To the ground again

Sporran
05-Sep-06, 17:04
Summer days will fade
And autumn's golden glory
Will colour our world

Sporran
05-Sep-06, 17:14
Steve Irwin has died
Little man, larger than life
Many will miss you

Bobinovich
05-Sep-06, 21:17
Not season related but true (for many) nevertheless

The hoover sits in
its own little cupboard space
gathering much dust

Kenn
05-Sep-06, 22:05
Sparkling dewdrops on a spider's web
Autumn's here
And summer's dead.

golach
05-Sep-06, 22:29
I sit in the Org
with nipping brain
some folk in here
gi me a pain

Gleber2
05-Sep-06, 22:58
My posterior pain
As winter's fresh approaching
Seems to come from you

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 03:19
There's time and a place
To have feelings of discord
Please don't have them here.

Ann
06-Sep-06, 07:08
Love the Haiku folks; keep them coming!

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 10:28
Will you not join us Ann and create some? For help, look at #5 in this thread and also at Sporran's pieces - go on, give it a go.

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 14:25
There's time and a place
To have feelings of discord
Please don't have them here.
Clearly I can see
Your concerns about this thread
but Golach is friend.


Well at least he was
When, winter's snow a whirling,
We met and conversed.

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 14:29
Clearly I can see
Your concerns about this thread
but Golach is friend.


Well at least he was
When, winter's snow a whirling,
We met and conversed.


So what I observe
Is really far from the truth
So why should that be?

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 14:32
So what I observe
Is really far from the truth
So why should that be?

Pierce the Illusion
See the truth that lies beneath
As two jokers smile

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 14:39
I have seen such smiles
And I'm not really convinced
Truth is perception

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 15:02
I have seen such smiles
And I'm not really convinced
Truth is perception

See, in the Dojo
Two friends, to pass winter's time
Will but gently fight.

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 15:09
But here in U. K.
No Dojo, not winter, not yet
And he's kin, not friend?

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 15:15
But here in U. K.
No Dojo, not winter, not yet
And he's kin, not friend?
Poets paint a scene
In metaphor the meaning hid
To open the mind.

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 15:27
And painters who write
In script unfamiliar
Tend more to confuse

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 15:35
If unfamiliar learn
and bright, like frost, will be seen
Your new intellect

Is confusion
To be epitaph of man
He who will not see.

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 15:52
May old dog learn new?
Less bright, more ashen, less clear
Too late in this case.

My observation
Surely the Past can be seen
The Future, No.

Niall Fernie
06-Sep-06, 16:03
How much I detest,
things drawn from the internet,
that they did not write.


They post and they post,
yet have nothing new to say,
how I love my job.

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 16:37
How much I detest,
things drawn from the internet,
that they did not write.


They post and they post,
yet have nothing new to say,
how I love my job.

Does the Org exist
for the folk or do the folk
exist for the Org.

Does power corrupt
Or does it only corrupt
the corruptable.

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 16:42
How much I detest,
things drawn from the internet,
that they did not write.


They post and they post,
yet have nothing new to say,
how I love my job.

Despite your dislike
The 'Net's like a library
For people to use

Repetitive posts
Are a bore and a pain
Inspire us, please do.

Saveman
06-Sep-06, 17:45
Of this I've never
seen the like of before
I guess I am sad.

Digging deeper down
I find I'm one of you
where does that leave me?

Sporran
06-Sep-06, 17:55
Now the grey sky pours
The welcome watery rain
Nourishes parched plants

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 18:11
Of this I've never
seen the like of before
I guess I am sad.

Digging deeper down
I find I'm one of you
where does that leave me?

Short of a sylable!:roll: 5 7 5

Sporran
06-Sep-06, 18:17
Dunnet Head Lighthouse
Beams with musical talent
From near and afar

Kingetter
06-Sep-06, 18:55
Of this I've never
seen the like of before
I guess I am sad.

Digging deeper down
I find I'm one of you
where does that leave me?


Each day that you wake
Is both new and a challenge
So be of good cheer

Its not down but up
Is where we are located
On top of Mount Olympus.

Gleber2
06-Sep-06, 19:26
Each day that you wake
Is both new and a challenge
So be of good cheer

Its not down but up
Is where we are located
On top of Mount Olympus.

Ye of the elite
Your hubris will condemn ye
To the blackest pits.

Saveman
06-Sep-06, 20:23
Short of a sylable!:roll: 5 7 5



My maths is not good
i do confess to you all
so i'll try again

Gleber2
07-Sep-06, 15:57
Like cherry blossoms
In a fresh spring breeze blowing
Rheghead is long gone.

Kingetter
07-Sep-06, 16:19
Chaff blown by the wind
Lingers on in memory
Gone but here, agree?

Gleber2
07-Sep-06, 17:28
Chaff blown by the wind
Lingers on in memory
Gone but here, agree?

Here there is no doubt
When corporate body gone
Some spirit remains.

Kingetter
07-Sep-06, 17:33
And I'm in no doubt
As to where I'm going to next
My tea I'm after.

Sporran
07-Sep-06, 18:54
Stroma and Swona
Leave them alone SNP
We won't let them go!

canuck
07-Sep-06, 21:33
Celtic knots spring forth
To mourn the loss of Rheghead
Oh, what a sad day.

Gleber2
07-Sep-06, 21:38
With those who have gone
Into spectral mist long past
He is finding friends.

Sporran
07-Sep-06, 21:51
Rheghead, come back please
We'll miss ye oan oor forums
Dinna leave say seen!

Kenn
07-Sep-06, 21:51
Scarlet berries hang in clusters
Reflected in deep dark pool
Skelpie lurks below

canuck
07-Sep-06, 23:10
Some of us do great
at this. Others like me do
not quite do as well.

Tiger Jones
07-Sep-06, 23:54
The cygnet; now brown
Maturity nears, turns white
Some day bears young too

golach
08-Sep-06, 00:09
Rheghead went his way
his choice alone
why should we cry

Gleber2
08-Sep-06, 00:32
Rheghead went his way
his choice alone
why should we cry

Haiku is strict in form
Rules are not to be broken
Five seven five must be.

Kingetter
08-Sep-06, 01:12
Some of us do great
at this. Others like me do
not quite do as well.

Practice helps and besides, they make one think.

Kingetter
08-Sep-06, 01:15
Haiku is strict in form
Rules are not to be broken
Five seven five must be.

Wanna put a 'stickie' up about that?

Kingetter
08-Sep-06, 03:07
Stroma and Swona
Leave them alone SNP
We won't let them go!

But you'll need to let something go from a full PM mailbox!!!!

Sporran
08-Sep-06, 05:15
But you'll need to let something go from a full PM mailbox!!!!

Aye, you're right my friend
I need to clear my mailbox
Glad you let me know!

golach
08-Sep-06, 10:27
Gleber2 rules from the North
His rules he says are the Law
But I dont' think so

Kingetter
08-Sep-06, 11:21
This house is for friends
Not a site to do battle
So give us a break?

Gleber2
08-Sep-06, 12:19
Gleber2 rules from the North
His rules he says are the Law
But I dont' think so

To obey the rules
writ long ago in Japan
Is to write haiku.

To ignore the rules
Writ long ago in Japan
Is to write nonsense.

trinkie
08-Sep-06, 13:20
To squabble in Haiku
Gives joy to a few
So sad
So bad
Adieu !

canuck
08-Sep-06, 13:45
It seems this to me
Early on a clear fall morn
The org board is slow

Gleber2
08-Sep-06, 13:58
To squable takes two
I only wish to instruct
Who is less aware

Big Jean
08-Sep-06, 16:54
The playful jabs may
go back and forth, but friendship
lurks below I think !

Gleber2
08-Sep-06, 17:47
The playful jabs may
go back and forth, but friendship
lurks below I think !

One can choose one's friends
But those who are related
Are there forever.

Big Jean
08-Sep-06, 21:18
I too, I admit
Have some I would gladly see
Go far, far away .

Then again I know
I would dearly miss them, so
I take back those thoughts .

Hold close all your kin
For you never know when time
Will take them from you .


(by the way Gleber2, glad you have stayed !!)

Gleber2
08-Sep-06, 22:38
(by the way Gleber2, glad you have stayed !!)

I took a risk yet
as winter cometh too soon
I am glad I stayed.

Big Jean
09-Sep-06, 01:27
Reds and golds appear.
Leaves start to fall, crisp days come.
It's Autumn's glory.

Gleber2
09-Sep-06, 03:53
Reds and golds appear.
Leaves start to fall, crisp days come.
It's Autumn's glory.

Autumn's glory is
Precursor of short sharp days
When winter frost shines.

Sporran
09-Sep-06, 05:03
Autumn's glory is
Precursor of short sharp days
When winter frost shines.

Monochrome marvel
Caithness in blanket of white
Bold grey sea and sky!

Gleber2
09-Sep-06, 14:28
Monochrome marvel
Caithness in blanket of white
Bold grey sea and sky!
Bright red spot moving,
Clear upon unbroken snow.
A child coming home.

Sporran
11-Sep-06, 08:33
It's been five years since
Two planes swooped like birds of prey
Upon Twin Towers

Crashing, exploding
The dastardly deed was done,
Hell's inferno next

Both towers collapsed
The world watched dazed and confused
Shocked by what they'd seen

Not a movie this
But a real life horror show
On our TV screens

Many lost their life
They perished before their time
And the whole world mourned...

Gleber2
11-Sep-06, 20:14
Bush and Blair then had
An excuse to kill thousands
In the Middle East.

Gleber2
12-Sep-06, 15:49
Does God exist or not
Is there a Heaven and Hell
What does it matter.

Gleber2
13-Sep-06, 13:26
It seems to me, though
Many people like to argue
There is no answer.

canuck
13-Sep-06, 21:13
To fuss the future
And not love life everyday
Is time just wasted

Big Jean
13-Sep-06, 23:14
Believer I am.
It provides me peace and joy.
The answer for me .

I do not expect
Many followers, you see,
All have their own thoughts .

But for me alone,
Comfort, hope, the afterlife
Awaits heavenly .

Sporran
14-Sep-06, 06:51
The Caithness tartan
Brown, black, lilac, yellow, red
Landscape in colour!

Brown mooreland, black peat
Lilac heather, yellow beach
Red sunset beauty!


http://www.mcallans.co.uk/images/products/96_large_caith.jpg

Gleber2
15-Sep-06, 04:30
Kingetter has gone
And so few write Haiku now
That the muse has flown.

Sporran
15-Sep-06, 04:57
Kingetter has gone
And so few write Haiku now
That the muse has flown.

Soon he will return
And we must try to write more
To please and amuse.

j4bberw0ck
15-Sep-06, 16:06
Soon he will return
And we must try to write more
To please and amuse.

Hi! Coo! Summer ends,
Winter creeps: Kingetter rests.
Warms toes by the fire. :lol::lol:

Gleber2
15-Sep-06, 17:12
In sunny Shetland
He will always need a fire
On September nights.

j4bberw0ck
15-Sep-06, 18:23
Unst: Sixareens race
on silver sea to da haaf.
Catch well; fish gutted (in both senses :-) )

Gleber2
15-Sep-06, 18:31
I feel that Shetland
And Orkney should be given
To Norway again.

j4bberw0ck
15-Sep-06, 18:45
Ahh, far, fair Norway...
To return to the fold now,
Financial good news!

Snow and frost on trees
Health Service works; where may
I buy my ticket?

canuck
15-Sep-06, 20:40
Soon The Kin returns
His camera full of art
To amuse us all.

Pink Lippy
16-Sep-06, 01:24
In late summer time:
Find all posts by Pink Lippy (http://forum.caithness.org/search.php?do=finduser&u=1711)
And make up your mind.

Sporran
16-Sep-06, 05:19
I feel that Shetland
And Orkney should be given
To Norway again.

If that did occur
We'd point to Old Man of Hoy
And say "There's Norway!"

Gleber2
16-Sep-06, 15:00
Soon cold winter winds
Will howl around the Lighthouse
Hoy unseen through mist.

scotsboy
16-Sep-06, 15:44
The wind blew
The skitter flew
Over the hill and killed a coo

A Caitness Hacoo

canuck
16-Sep-06, 15:57
Haiku is strict in form
Rules are not to be broken
Five seven five must be.

Be careful Scotsboy
When Gleber2 says behave
The law is sacred.

scotsboy
16-Sep-06, 16:44
Aye that is for Haiku, as I said mine is a HACOO;)

Gleber2
16-Sep-06, 16:55
Aye that is for Haiku, as I said mine is a HACOO;)

Sentence passed now
you will spend eternity
In Gollum's control.

canuck
16-Sep-06, 17:29
Aye that is for Haiku, as I said mine is a HACOO;)

We are purists here
HACOO is another thread
For springtime artists

Gleber2
16-Sep-06, 17:54
There is a coo here
It has gone now it would seem
It must have shifted.

Genuine Hacoo.

roblovesplastic
16-Sep-06, 18:03
have a sticky on what a Haiku is and the rules,

pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease

Gleber2
16-Sep-06, 18:51
From: http://home.clara.net/nhi/gepm002.htm

"The haiku originates from Japan.

How To Write Haiku

The haiku is a very simple form of writing. So think many poets exposed to this verse for the first time. The more perceptive of them soon realise that it can in reality be rather difficult. A casual glance at magazines or web pages will often show a wealth of examples, good, bad and indifferent. On asking further the poet usually gets told that haiku are traditionally written in three lines of 5-7-5 syllables. They may also be told that all haiku include a "season word" (kigo) to indicate the time of year to which the haiku relates. For a beginning this might do."

So, an example might be like this -

rain drops keep falling
rivers flow swiftly, seawards
to make us more rain

though "season" isn't mentioned.

Are the rules 'hard and fast' as regards form? Probably not anymore, but applying them does make haiku writing more of an inspiring challenge.


have a sticky on what a Haiku is and the rules,

pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease

All you need to get started.:eek:

roblovesplastic
16-Sep-06, 20:03
johnny explain it or shut it

phoenix
16-Sep-06, 20:07
Summers gone, or is
it? The plants they grow again, in
confusion they are!

My first bash at Haiku. I find it very interesting :) youll keep me right wont you Gleber2? How have I done so far? :Razz

Gleber2
16-Sep-06, 20:30
johnny explain it or shut it
Are you so drunk or otherwise that you can't see that the last post from me explains it all.


Summers gone, or is
it? The plants they grow again, in
confusion they are!

My first bash at Haiku. I find it very interesting youll keep me right wont you Gleber2? How have I done so far? :Razz

Within the rules Phoenix. In my opinion it reads better when the lines are not split up. But beauty is in the eye of the poet.:D

phoenix
16-Sep-06, 20:48
Within the rules Phoenix. In my opinion it reads better when the lines are not split up. But beauty is in the eye of the poet.:D


Cheers Gleber2......I think I know what you mean! :)

golach
16-Sep-06, 21:11
There is a coo here
It has gone now it would seem
It must have shifted.

Genuine Hacoo.
Not an origional, more from the Dundee area than Dunnet, but a good adaption

canuck
16-Sep-06, 22:05
We have been given
The task of keeping this thread
Pure 'til Kin returns.

canuck
16-Sep-06, 22:11
Rob, my friend, just write
Three lines of lyrics with beats
That go five, seven, five.

golach
17-Sep-06, 00:54
Not an origional, more from the Dundee area than Dunnet, but a good adaption

On yonder hill there stands a coo
it must have moved
Its no there noo

canuck
17-Sep-06, 01:33
How can the world end
With G2 writing such poems
The sun shines on us

j4bberw0ck
17-Sep-06, 11:13
I don't know about you
But thinking in five, seven,
five is challenging.

roblovesplastic
17-Sep-06, 11:23
man likes to control
all the world is a forum
give yourself a poke

Gleber2
17-Sep-06, 11:58
man likes to control
all the world is a forum
give yourself a poke

You got it, Plastic Drum Basher.

canuck
17-Sep-06, 14:14
The drum has sounded
rob writes like the Haiku peeps
We give a huge cheer

Gleber2
17-Sep-06, 14:34
The drum has sounded
rob writes like the Haiku peeps
We give a huge cheer

But are we not asked
To refer to the season
To obey the rules.

trinkie
17-Sep-06, 14:44
The night is so still
But sounds of distant drumming
Fill my heart with joy.

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 17:53
Oh lets have a proper go then:

It was in the night
The bad dream that came to me
Daylight removed it

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 17:56
Breakfast on the go
Lunch taken in my office
Dinner I can chew

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 17:58
Work is a burden
Study enlightens my time
Family is life

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:01
Hot in the morning
And all during the long day
Night is no saviour

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:03
I can not see me
I can sometimes see through me
Can you see though me?

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:06
Mince and tatties mmm
Clapshot, manna from heaven
MacDonalds, pure trock

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:09
Skate wings make ye go
So do oysters so they say
Water is our blood

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:11
Dust from outer space
Does not choke our lungs the same
We’re all made of stars

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:14
Singing is not me
Sweet is not the sound I make
Let me think not sing

canuck
17-Sep-06, 18:15
But are we not asked
To refer to the season
To obey the rules.

Oh for one so keen
I oft forget the season
May the rules return.

Gleber2
17-Sep-06, 18:22
Prolific Scotsboy
With your new found talent,
Ease our winter nights.

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:34
Good intentions may
Good deeds may on occasion
Ignorance abides

canuck
17-Sep-06, 18:39
Won't Kin be happy
On his fall return to find
So many with the muse.

J4 takes a try
Silver Darlings gives it life
Phoenix is for real.

Scotsboy is profound
rob has seen a new talent
Spring will surely come.

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:45
Idi Amin said
Look, I am the King of Scots
A muslim monarch

roblovesplastic
17-Sep-06, 18:50
I love haiku too
yes just like u but wait
here comes winter poo

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 18:50
Are we all the same?
What makes you think we differ?
I can get angry

canuck
17-Sep-06, 19:04
Anger need not be
With Haiku friends around you
We like your seasons.

scotsboy
17-Sep-06, 19:12
The search for my soul
Carries me home, away, back, forth
Finding it I’ll rest

Gleber2
17-Sep-06, 19:18
The search for my soul
Carries me home, away, back, forth
Finding it I’ll rest

Rest will never come
If you need a soul to find
The way to your bed.

Big Jean
17-Sep-06, 19:34
Cool breezes blow now.
My summer so quickly gone.
Red and gold I see.

What will follow soon?
Dancing snowflakes falling down
Bring dark days for me.

Gray skies loom above
Not a pleasant sight you see.
Ice, walk carefully !

Stop, look at the young
Enjoying every snowflake.
No dark days for them .

trinkie
17-Sep-06, 19:47
Naked lying there
Two babies born this fine day
Loving parents smile

roblovesplastic
17-Sep-06, 21:17
Cool breezes blow now.
My summer so quickly gone.
Red and gold I see.

What will follow soon?
Dancing snowflakes falling down
Bring dark days for me.

Gray skies loom above
Not a pleasant sight you see.
Ice, walk carefully !

Stop, look at the young
Enjoying every snowflake.
No dark days for them .


u followed the rules and made a pretty picture.

phoenix
17-Sep-06, 21:37
My doctor did say
A poet I would be one day
When SAD would leave me.

I Love it! :)

Sporran
18-Sep-06, 00:14
It is good to see
Org haiku writers increase
Variety's nice!

Jackpot
18-Sep-06, 08:11
understanding not
although others make perfect sense
a go I would have

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 08:48
It is what you do
That matters most in this life
Others matter not.

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 08:58
Birds twitter and sing
Soft winds blow while we ponder
Mother Natures plans.

The equinox draws near
Nature she doth rest a while
Death awaits and calls!

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 12:38
We have no such need
For A Master or Teacher
Ourselves is our need.

When one lights their lamp
It touches on everyone else
For the world to see.

Then the I is we
And the we shall become one
The journey will start.

Magical for us
Mystical for us to see
Listen for the tone.

We will then ascend
To that Great Enlightenment
We have waited for.

The beings of Light
Shall guide the way, have no fear,
All is in my hands.

Gleber2
18-Sep-06, 13:39
I am sure Kingetter will put me right when he returns but it is my belief that the essence of Haiku is the fact that only three lines and seventeen beats are used to express the thought or feeling. I could be wrong but if there are more than three lines it is not a Haiku. Therefore Phoenix's last post, although most enjoyable and poetically fine, is not, technically speaking, a Haiku. Perhaps Kingetter will educate us in longer Japanese forms when he come back. The writing of one's death poem is a very serious business I believe.

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 14:02
I am sure Kingetter will put me right when he returns but it is my belief that the essence of Haiku is the fact that only three lines and seventeen beats are used to express the thought or feeling. I could be wrong but if there are more than three lines it is not a Haiku. Therefore Phoenix's last post, although most enjoyable and poetically fine, is not, technically speaking, a Haiku. Perhaps Kingetter will educate us in longer Japanese forms when he come back. The writing of one's death poem is a very serious business I believe.

I understand Gleber2! Sorry I got a bit carried away! :o I didnt like the last bit........The writing of ones death poem is a very serious business! I thought it was about the collective soul ascending to that higher level of consciousness! You will come to my funeral wont you! :eek:

Gleber2
18-Sep-06, 14:51
I understand Gleber2! Sorry I got a bit carried away! I didnt like the last bit........The writing of ones death poem is a very serious business! I thought it was about the collective soul ascending to that higher level of consciousness! You will come to my funeral wont you! :eek:
What makes you think that
You will be gone before me
You might live longer.

A Death poem is suppused to sum up, in three lines, your whole life.

I have been a singer
My voice has annoyed many,
Many many times.

This could be mine but I think the reaper won't be by for a while (I hope) so this is only an example.:D

canuck
18-Sep-06, 15:53
"Eulogy" might best
Convey the winter sense made
With words "death poem".

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 15:59
What makes you think that
You will be gone before me
You might live longer.

A Death poem is suppused to sum up, in three lines, your whole life.

I have been a singer
My voice has annoyed many,
Many many times.

This could be mine but I think the reaper won't be by for a while (I hope) so this is only an example.:D

You had me worried I thought you meant that I had predicted my own death! My three lines would read

I found Planet Earth
A very strange place where man
Lives by their own rules

I had many dreams
Of the reaper at my door
I kept the door shut :)

Gleber2
18-Sep-06, 16:02
"Eulogy" might best
Convey the winter sense made
With words "death poem".

After death eulogy
Before passing death poem
Many winters yet.

Big Jean
18-Sep-06, 17:07
I am sure Kingetter will put me right when he returns but it is my belief that the essence of Haiku is the fact that only three lines and seventeen beats are used to express the thought or feeling. I could be wrong but if there are more than three lines it is not a Haiku. Therefore Phoenix's last post, although most enjoyable and poetically fine, is not, technically speaking, a Haiku. Perhaps Kingetter will educate us in longer Japanese forms when he come back. The writing of one's death poem is a very serious business I believe.

If it is as Gleber2 says, I have also been guilty of a "non" Haiku . However, if each segment is posted or viewed separately, would that qualify ? Each part Phoenix has posted could be read as individual pieces, although I guess it would come down to the "season" part missing . Obviously I need to learn much more about Haiku . Your pieces are beautiful Phoenix and I enjoy reading them . No, I am not meaning the death part ! Hopefully Kingetter will put me right too !

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 17:24
Thanks Big Jean :)

Death is for some okay
As re-birth will follow soon
It is necessary

Gleber2
18-Sep-06, 17:35
Thanks Big Jean :)

Death is for some okay
As re-birth will follow soon
It is necessary
Like passing seasons,
From life to life moving up
The soul must travel.

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 18:24
Like passing seasons,
From life to life moving up
The soul must travel.

Is this the time then?
When the tone will be heard soon
Above and Below

I dont know what Im on about :cool: or do I? :eek:

Gleber2
18-Sep-06, 20:41
Is this the time then?
When the tone will be heard soon
Above and Below

I dont know what Im on about :cool: or do I? :eek:

Play games with the truth
But the eternal truth remains
Stars still sing in tune.

phoenix
18-Sep-06, 21:45
Play games with the truth
But the eternal truth remains
Stars still sing in tune.


Ke sera sera
Whatever will be will be
Ill go with the flow :)

canuck
18-Sep-06, 22:23
Play games with the truth
But the eternal truth remains
Stars still sing in tune.


"But are we not asked
To refer to the season
To obey the rules." (see Gleber2 post 116)

Ann
18-Sep-06, 22:36
This link will help you understand Haiku.
There are strict rules to be a purist but the rules are often broken these days.

http://anitraweb.org/write/unicorn/haiku.html

There is also a delightful wee book by Pocketbooks called "Atoms of Delight"; an anthology of Scottish haiku and short poems edited by Alec Finlay.

I'd like to introduce you to one or two gems!

Scotch God
Kent His
Faither

Scotch Star-Trek
Kent His
Phaser

Scotch Education
I tellt ye
I tellt ye

Scotch Passion
Forgot
Mysel

Scotch Astrology
Omen
In the gloamin
(Alexander Scott)

Sunday Ferries
Every which way
but Lewis
(Angus Macmillan)

Turner Prize
A coo and a cauf
Cut in hauf
(William Hershaw)

Gleber2
18-Sep-06, 22:55
This link will help you understand Haiku.
There are strict rules to be a purist but the rules are often broken these days.

)

We are supposed to mention season but not de rigeur these days. I think I will try to stay pure in furure verse

.
The tatties howked
Puffins long since flown away
Seems winter comes.

phoenix
19-Sep-06, 09:12
Sorry everyone! I will try to stick the rules, it doesnt come easy. :o Discipline is what I need for today! :(



Three days she will sleep
Then return in her splendour
And autumn shall come.

trinkie
19-Sep-06, 12:27
The sea is raging
Our herring nets now so full
Food for the winter

trinkie
19-Sep-06, 12:31
She stands on the brae
Waiting for the fishing boats
Winter clouds so black

roblovesplastic
19-Sep-06, 19:29
i wan der as lone
ly as a stoat in the spring
of stoatyness, yeah.

canuck
19-Sep-06, 20:09
The grey clowds hang low
Over fields of pink heather
Rob really gets it.

roblovesplastic
19-Sep-06, 20:13
The grey clowds hang low
Over fields of pink heather
Rob really gets it.

to me your far off
but not so far as u dont care
i feel warm inside

Moira
20-Sep-06, 00:19
Days of youth long gone
Autumn golds fleeting, shortlived
Wisdom arrives late

canuck
20-Sep-06, 01:22
Autumn comes alive
A day of new birth begins
Joy makes friends with hope.

Gleber2
20-Sep-06, 01:32
Days of youth long gone
Autumn golds fleeting, shortlived
Wisdom arrives late

I'm sure Kingetter would agree with me that this is one of the best Haiku's so far in this thread.

phoenix
20-Sep-06, 19:16
Lights of gold and blue
Dance across the waves and pools
Like spirits in flight.

Gleber2
20-Sep-06, 19:22
Lights of gold and blue
Dance across the waves and pools
Like spirits in flight.

Dragonfly vibrates
Short fast life almost gone
So fast the seasons.

scotsboy
20-Sep-06, 19:32
Serendipity
A chance encounter with fate
As luck would have it

phoenix
20-Sep-06, 19:34
Dragonfly vibrates
Short fast life almost gone
So fast the seasons.

Time! An Illusion
If wisely spent theres plenty
Then seasons will flow.

Gleber2
20-Sep-06, 19:46
Time! An Illusion
If wisely spent theres plenty
Then seasons will flow.

For the dragonfly
The seasons of single day
Will last for ever.

phoenix
20-Sep-06, 19:57
For the dragonfly
The seasons of single day
Will last for ever.

The dragonfly knows
The moves she makes with swift wings
In all the seasons.

Sporran
20-Sep-06, 20:10
Summer says goodbye
As Autumn days do greet us
Leaves lose their green hue

phoenix
21-Sep-06, 09:09
On clear starry nights
you will hear the Owl hooting
her words of wisdom.

phoenix
21-Sep-06, 20:47
Swallows are still here
weaving, dancing and singing
on summers last breathe.

Gleber2
21-Sep-06, 21:30
Swallows are still here
weaving, dancing and singing
on summers last breathe.

Flowers are fading
Winds are getting sharper now
Soon it will snow here.

sassylass
21-Sep-06, 23:25
a crash reduces
your expensive computer
to a simple stone

anon.

phoenix
22-Sep-06, 08:20
Flowers are fading
Winds are getting sharper now
Soon it will snow here.

I doubt it will snow
Global Warming is with us
No more four seasons.

Gleber2
22-Sep-06, 11:56
I doubt it will snow
Global Warming is with us
No more four seasons.
When the world warms up
The Gulf stream is going to stop
We will have ice here.

phoenix
22-Sep-06, 12:02
When the world warms up
The Gulf stream is going to stop
We will have ice here.

I hear you say this
I am unsure as to why
Time will tell all.

phoenix
22-Sep-06, 13:42
When the world warms up
The Gulf stream is going to stop
We will have ice here.

These things you can change
By a few words from the heart
It will be halted

Gleber2
22-Sep-06, 14:03
I wish that were true
It has gone too far by now
We await our fate.

phoenix
22-Sep-06, 14:11
I wish that were true
It has gone too far by now
We await our fate.


Awwh! This I dont want
I'd rather be saved than die
In this awful way.

Gleber2
22-Sep-06, 15:17
Awwh! This I dont want
I'd rather be saved than die
In this awful way.

This catastrophe
To happen in our lifetimes
I just don't think so.

trinkie
23-Sep-06, 07:47
Poetry welcomes
With open arms and light heart
All who would enter.




So come on in Gleeber, the meter's fine !

phoenix
23-Sep-06, 18:14
Sun beats down upon Earth
Her rays warm up the ocean
All things will soon change.

phoenix
23-Sep-06, 18:19
Where are the poets
Its so lonely here just now
Where have they all gone. :~(

Ann
24-Sep-06, 00:18
Where are the poets
Its so lonely here just now
Where have they all gone. :~(

They were at the Mill
Listening to John and Son
A great autumn night ;)

canuck
24-Sep-06, 01:01
Ah, music of light
How grand for us to have friends
Who play like the stars

Gleber2
24-Sep-06, 01:25
The notes flew like birds
Feathers wilting under lights
As hot as summer.

roblovesplastic
24-Sep-06, 19:58
the fog it might clear
but i will always be lost
in the snow patrol

roblovesplastic
24-Sep-06, 21:30
the snow aint so quick
as i'd run away to you
poke yersel im clear.

roblovesplastic
25-Sep-06, 02:27
the spiral it spins
as i do towards heaven
summer lets you dance

Sporran
25-Sep-06, 15:40
Where are the poets
Its so lonely here just now
Where have they all gone. :~(

Not bored but busy
This poet's run out of time
Must try to find some!

Gleber2
25-Sep-06, 16:04
Haiku's are easy
Sonnets take a lot more thought
On long winter nights.

Sporran
25-Sep-06, 17:40
Haiku's are easy
Sonnets take a lot more thought
On long winter nights.

That's true Gleber2
Writing Haiku is a breeze
Sonnets are harder.

Gleber2
25-Sep-06, 18:53
That's true Gleber2
Writing Haiku is a breeze
Sonnets are harder.

To complete and read
Your first perfect sonnet is
Unforgetable.

Big Jean
25-Sep-06, 19:43
Perfect it should be .
So impossible for me,
That sonnet to write !

trinkie
28-Sep-06, 14:17
Orkney Butterfly
Sitting on the ledge so still
Soft light touching you

phoenix
01-Oct-06, 23:20
Haiku its quiet
Do they sleep on Autumn night
When its dark and wet.

Gleber2
02-Oct-06, 01:27
It seems you are right
No-one stirs to write but you
Soon we will awake.

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 02:08
I'm not quite ready
To apply my pen and ink
Quill needs sharpening.

canuck
02-Oct-06, 02:55
The boys of summer
Have packed their bats and balls
Spring's a long way off :~(


http://toronto.bluejays.mlb.com/NASApp/mlb/index.jsp?c_id=tor

canuck
02-Oct-06, 03:08
I'm not quite ready
To apply my pen and ink
Quill needs sharpening.


Kin my friend take heart
Once you start you cannot stop
Haiku rules all speech.

(But take care because the substitute teacher you left in charge keeps reminding us that we need to include a reference to a season.)

Gleber2
02-Oct-06, 03:39
Now I will resign
Summer over, Kingetter
Is back and is boss.

Sporran
02-Oct-06, 03:52
Just had my birthday
Pearl anniversary too
Aye, tempus fugit!

Moira
02-Oct-06, 03:53
Somehow, I doubt that
Winter will make it's mark too
But we need you here

canuck
02-Oct-06, 03:53
Gleber2 wrote:
Now I will resign
Summer over, Kingetter
Is back and is boss.


Summer never ends
The org needs all its helpers
Please do not resign

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 10:39
No way am I boss
Though thank you for the title
Just one amongst friends.

Lets have no Winter
Of discontent and anger
Peace, Good Will to all.

Gleber2
02-Oct-06, 11:13
No way am I boss
Though thank you for the title
Just one amongst friends.

Lets have no Winter
Of discontent and anger
Peace, Good Will to all.


You see discontent
And anger where none exist
Just my humour sense.


I was joking but I only meant that I would resign from the position of the critical voice on this thread only. Anyway I've managed to inspire some more haiku writing it would appear. Sorry for the confusion!!!!

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 11:24
You see discontent
And anger where none exist
Just my humour sense.


I was joking but I only meant that I would resign from the position of the critical voice on this thread only. Anyway I've managed to inspire some more haiku writing it would appear. Sorry for the confusion!!!!

The anger etc I referred to was elsewhere on the org - not here, and I therefore apologise for the confusion in like manner.
Please stay and remain as the inspirational figure you are.
I'm keen right now to try and diversify our writing talents so am rather preoccupied with that.
Also, busy printing photographic results of my Shetland/Orkney holiday.

canuck
02-Oct-06, 14:24
Haiku master, before you divert your attention, we had a question.

Is Haiku a one verse, stand alone poem? Or can a poem have several verses?
It was an issue that came up while you were away about page one or page two.

phoenix
02-Oct-06, 14:40
Cleaning and washing
all these necessary chores
at times they do bore! :roll:

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 14:47
Haiku master, before you divert your attention, we had a question.

Is Haiku a one verse, stand alone poem? Or can a poem have several verses?
It was an issue that came up while you were away about page one or page two.

Master? Hehehe! Ah weel!

To my knowledge, Haiku tends to be used as a poem but one needs to think maybe of it as a thought/idea/concept or whatever, expressed in poetic manner. I feel then that it should be a one off, as it is but of a single thought. Associated thoughts deserve their own space, just as the 'original' one. Just my HO, and what I've gathered over the years since taking an interest in the genre.

Gleber2
02-Oct-06, 14:48
Cleaning and washing
all these necessary chores
at times they do bore! :roll:

Try substituting "Are boring at times" for the last line. Not so contrived and clumsy. Hope you don't mind the criticism.:D

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 15:02
NB - rhyme (or near rhyme?) not required.

Gleber2
02-Oct-06, 15:28
NB - rhyme (or near rhyme?) not required.

But the inclusion of a rhyme or near rhyme, although not required, is not wrong, is it?

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 15:40
But the inclusion of a rhyme or near rhyme, although not required, is not wrong, is it?

In a modern sense, no, but, taken in the context of
"it as a thought/idea/concept or whatever, expressed in poetic manner".
I would have thought it the exception rather than a rule to 'rhyme'. One would need to research way back and find real originals to know for sure. Rhyme by accident seems ok, but to deliberately create a rhyme makes it contrived and not I'd suggest 'in the spirit' of it.

Gleber2
02-Oct-06, 15:49
In a modern sense, no, but, taken in the context of
"it as a thought/idea/concept or whatever, expressed in poetic manner".
I would have thought it the exception rather than a rule to 'rhyme'. One would need to research way back and find real originals to know for sure. Rhyme by accident seems ok, but to deliberately create a rhyme makes it contrived and not I'd suggest 'in the spirit' of it.

We agree.!!!!

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 15:55
We agree.!!!!


Wouldn't have it any other way, friend.

canuck
02-Oct-06, 16:07
Ah, it is lovely
The neighbour of the beast and
Confusion, agree.

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 16:23
Ah, it is lovely
The neighbour of the beast and
Confusion, agree.


You think, huh? lol

canuck
02-Oct-06, 16:43
We agree.!!!!


Wouldn't have it any other way, friend.

These were my clues that you just might be agreeing.

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 16:47
These were my clues that you just might be agreeing.

So how did Sherlock Holmes manage without you?

phoenix
02-Oct-06, 17:19
Try substituting "Are boring at times" for the last line. Not so contrived and clumsy. Hope you don't mind the criticism.:D


I took precious time out from a big pile of ironing to do that little ditty :D...............you are right though! :}

Kingetter
02-Oct-06, 17:21
I took precious time out from a big pile of ironing to do that little ditty :D...............you are right though! :}

so which gave you most satisfaction, ironing or Haiku?

phoenix
02-Oct-06, 21:16
so which gave you most satisfaction, ironing or Haiku?

The ironing did! :) I realised that doing lots of chores like cleaning washing ironing your spirit is bereft.........therfore its not advisable to do Haiku in the middle of a pile of ironing. So after I finished the ironing and pondered on what you and Gleber2 had said with reagrds to the Haiku I wrote. I took myself away down the beach with the dog to recharge my flagging spirit with the elements .........it was invigorating! :D

Sporran
03-Oct-06, 19:07
Wikipedia has some interesting and useful information about Haiku, so I thought I'd post the link here (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku). Once you get there, keep scrolling down, as there's quite a lot of info.

Ann
03-Oct-06, 22:59
I agree Sporran, very interesting. Shows how haiku has been interpreted in various ways making it a more flexible form.

Thanks for the link!

pultneytooner
03-Oct-06, 23:22
snowdrifts ail, owners
quibbling floating caveman breathes
sadly, feather frowns

Kingetter
04-Oct-06, 02:08
Haiku thread lacks spark?
Needs more current from elsewhere
Pulteneytooner brings.

canuck
04-Oct-06, 03:03
Always be sincere
Even if you don't mean it
Pultneytooner signs

phoenix
04-Oct-06, 08:38
Crisp clear air a sign
Autumns here for us at last
stars twinkle and shine.

phoenix
04-Oct-06, 13:21
so which gave you most satisfaction, ironing or Haiku?


Im going back to that question today if you dont mind. :) The ironing gave me most satisfaction as that was what I was meant to be doing at that time! A time for everything, theres a time for chores, a time for Haiku, a time for peace, a time for play etc. Theres a time for everything! When you are doing what youre meant to be doing it gives satisfaction no matter what it is thats being done! :D

pultneytooner
04-Oct-06, 13:36
sounds distend, floating
water meanders, reeds groan
reflections ripple

Kingetter
04-Oct-06, 13:55
When we have the time
Though lack the inclination
Should we do Haiku?

phoenix
04-Oct-06, 14:48
When we have the time
Though lack the inclination
Should we do Haiku?

I dont think we should
Haiku done at the wrong time
Goes against the grain.

Gleber2
04-Oct-06, 14:52
I dont think we should
Haiku done at the wrong time
Goes against the grain.

Thanks to Kingetter
My thoughts often take the form
Of simple Haiku.

Kingetter
04-Oct-06, 15:26
If it suits our mood
Haiku makes creative thoughts
Seasoning the mind.

Lavenderblue2
04-Oct-06, 16:12
Thought I'd have a try...

We only try
To contribute to this org
Whatever the way

Those who try
Are not always able
To do great things…

We didn’t write
No contribution by us
The org vanished.


LB

Kingetter
04-Oct-06, 16:27
Good effort and thanks for trying. You need to try and get the 5-7-5 thing going. G2 is a craftsman and explains things better than I.
Effort though comes first.:)

Lavenderblue2
04-Oct-06, 16:31
Good effort and thanks for trying. You need to try and get the 5-7-5 thing going. G2 is a craftsman and explains things better than I.
Effort though comes first.:)

Thanks Kingetter, you are kind - I'll have another try later maybe.

LB

Kingetter
04-Oct-06, 16:45
LB - You know what I mean by 5-7-5?

pultneytooner
04-Oct-06, 17:50
complex flower floats
branch regrets, free petal fades
dimly, clear, forever

Can I use punctuation?

Gleber2
04-Oct-06, 18:08
complex flower floats
branch regrets, free petal fades
dimly, clear, forever

Can I use punctuation?


Why not ,but it would read just as well without the comma's and would change the meaning in an interesting way.

pultneytooner
04-Oct-06, 18:43
Why not ,but it would read just as well without the comma's and would change the meaning in an interesting way.
I thought a ? after forever would add something or is that silly?

Kingetter
04-Oct-06, 18:50
My take, for what its worth is, what are you trying to communicate, and therefore are you asking or are you telling? Does making it a question improve it or not?
Alternatively, you could allow the reader to find out for him/herself whether a question exists.